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You are the flower, I'm the rain by Shattered-Earth You are the flower, I'm the rain by Shattered-Earth
You are the air that I breathe
Without you I am incomplete
You are the only one for me





Original print for Otakon inspired by the song Redline Day From the anime movie Redline. It was based on this sketch which was for a sketch a day thing, omg so many seperate origins XD! I kind of like the sketch better though /sob

I put this on critique requested, but there are mistakes/intentional distortions that I want to point out too (so there's no need to repeat them unless you disagree lol). The wings first of all, are not accurate to life at all. The pose was already messed up from the sketch so i just went all out for stupid-anime wing anatomy. The dress I didn't know how to do right :/ It was originally going to be just a flower type dress, but then i thought it would be cool to make it look like dirty brass, but i just didn't do a very good job polishing it up. The black hair girl's right arm is also weird too.. just.. weird <_<.. hell i'm sure all the arms are weird! In retrospect i should have removed the white hair girl's boob completely too LOL, spines don't work that way >_> <_< (geez maybe i should edit this before final prints eh LOL)

Purchasable as as a print from here: [link]
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Revise. Like you said the pose/stupid-anime wing anatomy just looks strange. It almost looks as if the wings are stuffed into the picture, seems "forced". The Dark haired girls "dress" looks like it's made of dirty feathers instead of brass. If you're going to go for the brass look make it shine (even dirty brass shines) and don't round it. The boob which is hardly noticeable works in favor of the piece. Unless she's a A cup she'll have something hanging down, it's just natural gravity. I'm definitely in support of revision before anything is final. Good piece though. I like where it's going, but I do hope you continue on it and make changes.
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Fantastic piece. The colors are gorgeous, how they emerge into warm from cool, focusing our attention on the subject, and you've worked in just the right amount of subtle texture. The anatomy looks fine to me, particularly the gestures of the hands and the back of the upper figure (black-hair's right arm looks good to me, btw). The negative shapes created by the arms also do some great things for the image. The only thing about the wings that bugs me is that they do seem a bit stuffed into the frame, but I understand the compositional choice you made there, to frame the action. I think you could have made them curve more, out then back in, and achieved the same result with a bit more elegance. But that's really the only minor issue I see in an otherwise wonderful piece.
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DarkerEve Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
Amazing artwork :love:
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2012   Digital Artist
Thank you :)
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poluptukha Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012
Do you know that song ' like a flower needs the rain'? [link]
nice work ":)
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012   Digital Artist
I didn't know it, thank you :)
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poluptukha Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012
oh haha, i thought thats what it was inspired from :D
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012   Digital Artist
XD in the description i already said it was inspired by the song "redline day" from the anime "redline"
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poluptukha Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012
oh sorry! haha ;)
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CapitanaRecondita Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Professional
wonderful meaning
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   Digital Artist
thank you!
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CapitanaRecondita Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Professional
you're welcome!
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Neoconvoy Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Good colors and textures!

The main critic, would be regarding the white haired girl's nose. Make the same pose of thher, and you maybe notice that the tip of the nose is near to the lip, or covering part of it.

Also, the breast, it shouldn't be visible at that pose.

Regarding lighting, is a bit weird.

While checking the light sources, I noticed the background. Very interesting and well done!
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2012   Digital Artist
oh you're right about the nose, i don't know if it should cover the lip but it definitely needs to be longer.. hm.. hopefully i can fix that before i send them off to print >_< thanks for pointing it out! the brest i mentioned in my description, haha.
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JillLenaD Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Mm.. something I just thought of- should the top girl be able to bend her neck so far back? The top of her could be a top down view and the her back is a straight view from her back.
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
You're right! If you flip the image around actually the broken spine thing is REALLY noticeable LOL. It's one of those mistakes i didn't catch till much later and didn't want to redraw the entire thing because .. well cause i suck really. But yes, you are totally correct! People always want to show Boobs and butt, but i have an issue with always wanting to show more face even if it's not possible LOL
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JillLenaD Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Haha, well face is better than gratuitous boobs and butt.. XD
Understandable though, you'd have to redraw most of her pose to change that, and you already have the image stylized so I think it should be okay.
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JillLenaD Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
If it makes a difference-the sketch has a nicer value transition. What I mean is in the sketch the girl on top looks like an angel coming down from a sunbeam, she's lighter in value and the air around her is brighter, in the finished painting the characters are almost even in lighting and the sky has a less pronounced difference. Some of the hair is a little less flowy and light as well... umm visual weight "light," not value.. ah sorry that was confusing. XD

As for the dress...I think it looks nice on its own, but knowing that it's supposed to be brass, even dirty brass, it's a missed opportunity to put some lovely shine down! Even unpolished the light hits it a little [link] Unless you wanted it really old an dirty.. [link] in which case some of the gold and green/black tints might be interesting but still some shine too?

I almost feel like I'd want to see the top girl's eyes slightly open as well..

Of critique topic, I seriously love the colors in the bottom girl's hair and I love the way the top girl's hands are cradling her face, it seems so protective and sweet.
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
Yea, you see what i mean when blocking values in black and white is a lot easier for me? Once i get into the color i'm like WHAT AM I DOING?? lool

The only thing i'm afraid of with adding more highlights like someone else suggested is that it'll over power the rest of the image, cause shiny things tend to draw the eye, and with so many petals i feel like i'm going to over do it like i tend to >_<, but i have 2 weeks before i send the final prints out so we'll see! :D

Thanks for noticing the hands TuT, tough to get right. So used to drawing hands with strong sharp gestures.
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JillLenaD Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Awww, you'll get it! XD Have you tried putting a reference layer over the picture? You can make a black and white adjustment layer to put your image in greyscale and then turn that layer on and off to check the value as you work. As long as you make it it's own layer it's non-destructive and you can keep using it to check your value.

True.. but a little shouldn't be to off, especially if the value's holding the viewers attention where you want. Two weeks? Good luck! How much do you need to do still before then?

You're welcome, they came out nice.
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   Digital Artist
I have tried @_@ but i dunno.. it seems like the values work in greyscale but when i remember it it's not as good, I DUNNO /o\

I'm mostly done, i'm revamping some of my tutorials into posters. I don't know if anyone would buy them but it's worth a shot!
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JillLenaD Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Alright, it's fine. :'D You'll get it. =3=b

That's good! Oh, like reference sheets? That's an interesting idea.. well people like "how to draw" type books, so it seems like that'd work?
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012   Digital Artist
Maybe! Sort of like.. reference posters? I dunno, it'll be a "lets see how this sells" moment for me i guess XD
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JillLenaD Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Well good luck with them!
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Lilaccu Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012   Digital Artist
I like the details of their wings!
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
aw thanks :3
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Love the poses and the colors - the facial expressions are nicely done.
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
Glad you like it <3
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wanda-soulmeetsbody Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
it's truly wonderful:D
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
thank you!
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KittyStardraco Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
so beautiful, i love the placement of the hands it really show the connection between the characters
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
Thanks! It was worth it to redraw the hands so many times LOL
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NooniePuuBunny Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Loverly concept.
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
:party:
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DeadCobra Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012
Great
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
thanks~
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Scarose Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2012
deserves to be a daily deviation x]
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
:blush: Aw thanks
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Scarose Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012
c: np
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AzureJass Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this concept, I am guessing it wasn't the easiest to do ;P

I think you've done quite a good job with the anatomy of this piece, with them reaching and caressing for each other like that :)
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
Haha it feels like every drawing that isn't commissioned starts out so hazy and hard to pull together >_<, but thank you for liking the final result!
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Kiwi-Rose Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's awesome x3

I really like the poses :)
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
glad you do! :D
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Galm03 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa... So epic, i`d say...
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
Thanks xOx
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Galm03 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome!!! X-x
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TragicMusicality Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Student General Artist
i saw you draw this > u <
it looks wonderful
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2012   Digital Artist
Aw thanks :D thanks for coming to the stream too XD
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Pinlicous-Bases Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Simply amazing! I saw this sketch on your Livestream journal and I was so upset I missed it. D: But this certainly makes up for it! It is just so awesome. XD I would totally buy this and put it up in my room if I could.
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Shattered-Earth Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012   Digital Artist
Aw sorry i didn't get to see you today at the stream! I'm glad you like the final product though XD. (I'll be streaming again tomorrow hurrr)
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Pinlicous-Bases Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'll have to keep an eye out!
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Riicreations Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2012
I really like it, Your coloring is phenomenal as always a long with your anatomy <3 the poses are nice but some how I wish they could be more dynamic or maybe its just girls left arm still looking off >.< but i know it was already giving you problems from the beginning ^.^

Now i want to listen to Redline Day lol :D
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